05-28-2006, 07:47 PM
Hey there. You know the way you wrote the story, it kind of reminded me of The Cather In The Rye which is definately a good thing. I loved that book because everyone can relate to it in some way. Well I thought it was excellent and then at the end you kind of lost me. It seemed to end so quickly. I don't mean to criticize you because I am a terrible writer, it's just with the ending it kind of leaves you wanting to know what happens to the girl, and I don't understand exactly why Tylor even decided to leave at the end. Maybe I missed something? But overall, you have amazing potential to be a great writer. Hope this helped.