Could I Barrow a Moment of Your Time?

[Blight]

Yeah, I wasn?t even sure how good my advice would be because I work with plot more and this is definitely not my style, but I dug it nonetheless. Don?t worry about not liking my suggestions because I well understand not wanting other people to poke and prod my work.

I couldn?t really tell when chapter breaks were but rather than use time, use the position of the sun (or how light/dark it is out side) so you can elaborate on the setting as well in the same entry. Like a lunchtime we know it?s some where around noon, but later on don?t really know what time it is.