11-26-2004, 12:06 PM
Dialog is the devil! 
, yeah I really don't work go with it, hence why there's character introductions rather than interactment; that why you just know who they are rather than learn.
"And there is a lot of explaining in the beginning and then there is killing all of a sudden. There needs to be some middle ground there."
Sadly, if I changed this the story would lose all meaning to me; save for the missing plot, it was writen like that of a "classic" horror in which we meet the characters...good few minutes of boringness, them bame, one death a little more junk, a few more kills, & then a "sad" ending.
Hope I don't sound ungrateful to your advice, becuase I know sometimes I get defencive, but really, I thank you for the suggestions & tips.
, yeah I really don't work go with it, hence why there's character introductions rather than interactment; that why you just know who they are rather than learn."And there is a lot of explaining in the beginning and then there is killing all of a sudden. There needs to be some middle ground there."
Sadly, if I changed this the story would lose all meaning to me; save for the missing plot, it was writen like that of a "classic" horror in which we meet the characters...good few minutes of boringness, them bame, one death a little more junk, a few more kills, & then a "sad" ending.
Hope I don't sound ungrateful to your advice, becuase I know sometimes I get defencive, but really, I thank you for the suggestions & tips.
My Soul Brings Tears to Satanic Eyes.
If Max Collins, Matt Skiba, Jimmy Urine, & Mark Phillips had a child it would be one fu*ked up mofo, but 'it' would be the God of music.
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If Max Collins, Matt Skiba, Jimmy Urine, & Mark Phillips had a child it would be one fu*ked up mofo, but 'it' would be the God of music.
As-1D R077's temp homepage: http://www.freewebs.com/as1dr077/index.html